Friday, September 14, 2018

Aleksyia Profile

Bright lights shine down, and energetic music blares. Aleksyia LeClere takes a deep breath and steps onto the runway, all eyes immediately on her. She walks slowly towards the crowd as her dress swirls around her legs. Aleksyia spends a large amount of her time modelling. Her favorite photographer, Jennifer, and her mom help her choose outfits for when she appears in magazines to publicize herself. Aleksyia’s modelling career is off to a great start, but she always leaves plenty of time for her hobbies. 
 However, there is more to Aleksyia’s life than just modelling. In addition, Aleksyia’s time is spent reading action-packed books and boating with her friends and family. 
During her downtime, Aleksyia loves to curl up with a good book. The action and suspense of mystery and crime books make them easily her favorites. She tends to enjoy anything by C. S. Lewis the most, but she thoroughly enjoyed The Book Thief by Mark Zusak 
When she isn’t reading, Aleksyia may be found on a lake boating, tubing, or even water hoverboarding. While she enjoys participating in these activities anywhere, her favorite memories are at Okoboji where she went boating for the first time.  

16 comments:

  1. It looks like Aleksyia has a very different life outside of school. What are her favorite books by C.S. Lewis?? and how did she get into modelling??

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  2. Those are so very good follow up question Travis.
    Taylor, you did a very good job! This really explains my life experiences! You really got on the key points, and really made it flow. At a rate like this. You could be a professional!

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    1. DO you want to make some more follow up questions Taylor?

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  3. This is a really good article. It did seem kind of rushed though and felt like it was bouncing around. The beginning did catch my attention though.

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    1. I agree. Maybe some reorganization of paragraphs could help with this (there seemed to be more transitions than needed). I wonder how the end could come back to the beginning full circle. Hm.

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  4. I enjoyed reading this, it sounds very professional. Where and who does she model for? Also, we live in Iowa... so how much time does she really spend on the water? LOL

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    1. We actually have quite a few lakes here in Iowa, so water sports are considered a somewhat typical summer activity.

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  5. This was fun to read and well put together, her life sounds fun lol.

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  6. The start was interesting and put together well, it caught my attention pretty fast but the rest of the article just seems like a few sentences then it finishes, I feel personally like you put more time into just the beginning than you did for the rest of it.

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  7. You had a very creative way of putting this together, it felt a bit rushed but over all I got a good view of her life and things she enjoys doing.

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  8. I like how i was able to get to know her really well without having to ask her.

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  9. I really like the lead you used in this story as it got my attention right away. However, I feel like you could have wrote more about her modeling career, as you spent so much time building up to it in the lead.

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  10. The imagery at the very beginning was awesome. In fact, the whole piece was awesome. You should include more info about the modeling she does though. That would make it even better.

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  11. A little jumpy, but other then that, fun to read! Her life sounds fun and if this was a story, I would read it for sure.

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  12. I suggest adding some more detail it seemed as if it was being rushed but over all great work.

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  13. I liked reading this, but it could use some transitions to make it less jumping. I liked the information you showed though, because i had not known that about Aleksyia

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